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I'd much rather cry for you
'Cause my story is too painful to share
I'd much rather smile for you
'Cause my story is too painful to bare

So come here and I'll wrap my arms around you
Come here and I'll let your story shine
But after you share your story
Please don't ask me about mine

If only I could play the violin
I'd share my past through sorrowful chords
Vibrato on strings would be my voice
Fighting my demons with imaginary swords

Although I'm limited to words on paper
And the words aren't sung by a beautiful voice
These words make my story into a song
And this song confronts you with a choice

You can close your eyes
And pretend this is a fairytale
Pretend it's a meaningless story
That was never once true

Or you can open your eyes
And realise deep down
That the story isn't just about me
That you're the main character too

If you don't want to tell your story
As it is, spoken word to word
Turn your art into your voice
And you will always be heard

A picture speaks a thousand words
And music helps you through
If these words come to help me cope
Then they can help you too
Written at 2:44am last night whilst listening to Emilie Autumn's album 'Fight Like A Girl'.

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Silvina-Merleawe Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is absolutely beautiful. The words are melancholic and powerful and I really appreciate the rhyme scheme. The imagery created by the words themselves is so strong. Thank you for writing this. 
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much :hug:
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TheUniSquirrel Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Tuna cake duck butt. (you did ask for random)
On another note, this is a great poem! Its simplicity and rhyming pattern is nice. >_> I might start watching you.
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you! :hug:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The melancholy in this work makes it a good composition and in my opinion, that's what makes a wonderful work in the end.

There isn't much to say about this work other than: I can relate with each and every single stanza; the mention of the violin adding melancholy is suggestive of death and pain; while the last two stanzas add the final composition of what it means to complete the picture of how our story is important, only to those who matter. Because they are the ones who don't seem to be around that often... and we're left to deal with our lives as we thought we could...
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you for the review :aww:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Student Writer
Hello ~Lady---Vengeance!

On behalf of #InspireTheUninspired, I would like to congratulate you on being featured within our group! Please take a look when you have time and support your fellow artists:aww:

Keep writing and inspiring!:dance:

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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much! :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome:D
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MissObsidian95 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely :love:
I much prefer poems that rhyme and have so much emotion like this one :aww:
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :thanks:
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ShelleyAnderson Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So simple, so affective, it works, and I love it, cannot really say much else ^_^ :heart:
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Sorry for taking forever to reply, but thank you very much! :aww:
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ShelleyAnderson Featured By Owner May 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Heheh it's fine ^_^ I'm even worse!! :heart: :iconcrycryplz:
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:iconlady---vengeance:
Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Glad I'm not the only one :XD:
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CinEvans Featured By Owner May 20, 2013
:)
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:)
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theheek Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
awsomeness
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :)
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theheek Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
u are welcome
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Just thought you should know I'm nominating this for a DD
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:O Thank you so much! :hug:
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey there,

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique you requested. Sorry for the delay, we have so many poems to critique and are getting to each deviation as quickly as we can!

You had me hooked with the first stanza. You started out with strong emotion and easy words. I had to keep reading! Then the third stanza made me feel something- something familiar- you managed to pull me in further with just a few words that really say so much.

On the whole, I think many readers will find this very relatable. I think the ending was done quite nicely, it gave a little hope to the end which made me smile. Thank you for that. Otherwise, I really have no constructive criticism for you. I think you've done so well writing this. You should be really proud!

I hope you found this helpful. Thank you and have a great day!
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TheLunarDragon Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This Critique is on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition:

5/5 All around.

This poem is Phenomenal. My critique will have to be brief because I can find no fault with it. You nailed it, emotionally, spiritually, and metaphorically. This is definitely going to be one of my legitimate favorite pieces of poetry that I have read in my time as one of the resident critique writers for the group. This poem stood out for me, I was pleasantly surprised while reading it. I do suggest entering this piece into some sort of poetry competition, I honestly think it would do quite well. I look forward to seeing more from you in the future! Keep it up!
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am here on behalf of #PoeticalCondition to provide my critique:

Simply put, Wow... You're a good photographer, but this work was actually a breath of fresh air to me... I'm quite impressed.

I was reading this while listening to "Funeral Song" by The Rasmus... so the lines:

If only I could play the violin
I'd share my past through sorrowful chords
Vibrato on strings would be my voice
Fighting my demons with imaginary swords


struck a chord. A definitive chord, no less... The poem as a whole, is a bleeding heart poem that makes me glad to read.

I wasn't expecting your poems to be this good, to be quite honest. This is a very well metered ballad. Not exactly in the strict sense of the word, but I'm not an authoritarian - its the theme and the flow that matters most in any poem, that's the realization that I have reached. Hence, I'll spare the formalities about ballad format and posture and thus, treat it as a good well written poem...

best concluded by your own words of your story:

A picture speaks a thousand words
And music helps you through
If these words come to help me cope
Then they can help you too
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VoltaliatheMajestic Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student General Artist
By the way, might I use this for something? I promise to give credit afterwards.
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Sure, as long as you credit me and send me the link so I can see :)
Can I ask what you're gonna use it for? :)
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VoltaliatheMajestic Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student General Artist
You'll know... ;)
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
But now I'm curious :XD:
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VoltaliatheMajestic Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Student General Artist
Fits :iconwardenplz: and :iconthemistressplz: to a T. Except I suppose this could be from the former to the latter.
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Are they characters from a film or something? I have no idea :XD:
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VoltaliatheMajestic Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student General Artist
Well, they are from a cartoon called "Superjail!" that airs exclusively on Cartoon Network's night block, Adult Swim. If you ever see it, well... It's sorta hard to describe it aside from all the blood and gore and stuff. But let's just say it makes "Family Guy", "The Simpsons", and "American Dad" look like they should air on the Disney Channel.
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Ooh, it sounds interesting :XD:
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pcmdt Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
fine !
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks? :P
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pcmdt Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
XD
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0L50NJ4 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:worship: :worship: :worship:
My Gosh! This is what I have been doing and needing to say ... it leaves me wordless.
Thank you so much for expressing and finally saying what I could not. You have given me a voice, for I am mute/unable to say what I need to, for far to many reasons.
:hug: :love: :tighthug: :tighthug: :tighthug: :love: :hug:
:worship: :worship: :worship:
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you! I'm flattered :blush: glad I could help! :hug: :)
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0L50NJ4 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
And Merry Christmas :D
:xmas: :holly: :santa: :rudolph: :holly: :xmas:
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks! Hope you had a merry christmas too :D
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0L50NJ4 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I totally did. :D :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :D
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm glad :D
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0L50NJ4 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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MissBlondy Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
i like the message your giving
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you :)
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TehSweetheart Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
This is really beautifully written! (: Just thought you should know!
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Lady---Vengeance Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you! :)
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TehSweetheart Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012
You're welcome :)
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JOHN-DOEnKRIS-DARIO Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012
The raw emotion makes the words come alive, flows like music and enters the soul
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